Is There a Better Way to Say a Thing?

The editor that we'd originally had crapped the bed did a terrible job, and so she sort of saved us. Shea did the mechanics for up wend, but only kind of as a proof reader. So she hasn't had to actually edit mechanics to make them make more sense. And i'm finding there are subtleties of what i'm trying to say in the rule and how the rule is supposed to work that are colliding a little bit. Maybe what is a better way to say a thing, but not the best way to say that thing. Ye? Go.